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this is me all shattered and torn
i don't know which way to turn
i feel me going out of my mind
it's only just a matter of time
i'm about to break
it could be any second
i'm falling so fast
that i don't know how to help it
i have to find the strength within myself
to save me from with all i have left
sometimes i think i've lost it
then i realize
that it was only my imagination
that was hypmotized
i don't know which way to turn
i feel me going out of my mind
it's only just a matter of time
i'm about to break
it could be any second
i'm falling so fast
that i don't know how to help it
i have to find the strength within myself
to save me from with all i have left
sometimes i think i've lost it
then i realize
that it was only my imagination
that was hypmotized
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Re: this is me; feed back please
Wed, May 3, 2006 - 1:29 PMWell written, Liz!!!
I love the way this flows
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Re: this is me; feed back please
Wed, May 3, 2006 - 3:48 PMthanks bruce for your comment, i will send you something else. peace out
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Re: this is me; feed back please
Wed, May 3, 2006 - 2:21 PMYou use interesting imagery. My favorites are shattered and torn. I have more to say, but it takes me a bit...
It seems like only a highlight of a poem, like you have so much more to say. I take it like an iceberg. I can gather from just the top how huge it is, but I can't see the rest. I think you should expose more of yourself in your work... Never be afraid to cut yourself to the marrow for your art. It's what makes it special. -
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Re: this is me; feed back please
Wed, May 3, 2006 - 3:47 PMi appreciate your comment. this was a moment in my life that i was passing through, it is not a reflection of myself, just me in that moment. i look to this poem for insperation when i am facing something, i can see that it isn't as bad as it looks from where i am standing at that moment because sometimes a situation seems worse at that moment and then when you look back at it, you feel like it wasn't so bad after all because you made it through. thanks for your time and input. oh yeah and my favorite part is the part that sums it up for me, it was only my imagination that was hypmotized.
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Re: this is me; feed back please
Wed, May 3, 2006 - 4:27 PMI can relate. The element of time can do strange things in ones mind. Try being in love with a man you can not have and can only dream of. You know this soul so very well, But he doesnt know you do and never will because hes not even aware that you exist pineing, worshiping the very ground he walks on.
SO you observe him from afar, but he doesnt know that you are even interested. Besides hes very married......BUt all you have is dreams...........wanting to pierce the veil and rewrite his life and weave it into yours... Every single night..........Katherine Faunaserene
